RE: The Dark Soil of Her Eyes

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grindan in Cinnamon Cup Coffee • last year

The way you build the atmosphere here is so beautifully colorful and trippy! Each line builds a sense of magic, which totally pulled me in. You made me chuckle a few times with your wording, in particular:

I was so into her she could have drip fed me arsenic and I would have opened my mouth like a baby bird.

Hahaha! I adored the spirit of this story, and the way you highlighted the love between these two. Thanks for the fantastic read 💚

For STB entries, we do ask authors to add 3 or more photos though. It would be awesome if you could update to add a 3rd photo? ☕️ (don't worry, it's non-hallucinogenic tea)

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riverflows last year (edited)

Yes I can add a third no worries. Thanks, I am always so happy when you pop by!

I loved writing this - I felt hallucinatory as I stepped into that feeling. Lying under a girl tossing an orange above head on mushies is a great memory for me, though I wasn't in love with her as my narrator is with her mushroom queen. I'm not sure if her friend loves her back though - it feels like a secret love here. It's funny how we inhabit a world as we write! I was trying to get that sense of how time and space go a bit gooey. The awkward steps were fun to write for me!

Image done. Kinda ruined the look for me as the third isn't from same mushroom shoot and I'm gutted I didn't have a third but never mind. As long as you guys are happy 😊💕🍄

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grindan last year

I really appreciate you River!! 💚🤗

It's so cool that this partially hailed from a memory- I think it's a lot of fun to tap into trippy recollections when writing ahaha!

You know, I read this again with that pov, and found so many new layers (Like her pulling away from you trying to take her glasses off etc)... Goes to show that perspective when reading can change a whole lot- I suppose I just wanted her to love "you" back 😂 Sap mode over here...

It was cool to learn a bit more about the influence for your scenes here! You rock 😎

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riverflows last year

Hahah - I don't think so, but I try to rock when I can :P I wondered if I didn't come across properly, but I'm glad that the second reading made you see what I intended. You know, that dorky stage when you're not quite confident enough in your sexuality but you are soooo obsessed with someone, but can't quite say it? I mean this girl was going to drink as much mushroom coffee as her wish-she-was lover wanted! xx

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