This is a great setting
Like everywhere in Zeelis, there was no respite from noise. Outside, the rebuilding efforts created a wave of machine chaos; churning, drilling, hammering, and blasting.
I like how you let the world come out organically throughout the story, but each paragraph is nicely chiseled and packed with information. It has a sense of epic proportions like the grand space dramas of yore. Very nicely written.
Thanks so much man, I'm delighted that you're enjoying it. I decided to timestamp this one so I can work out a timeline of events for each story.
This is set 4 ACI, which is 4 years after the war ended, so the world being reconstructed and the governments regaining control is very present.
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I think a timeline is a great idea when you're dealing with multiple events. JK Rowling plotted Harry Potter this way.
Jesus that's crazy, but maybe I could find it useful to jot one of my own down, just so I can have a rough map to go by.
I think I'll print it out and keep it for inspiration. That is a great way of creating an overview of the story.
