hello @osomar357, thank you for writing in The Ink Well. I would encourage you to do some reading on Adding Conflict and Show, Don't Tell. Conflict needs to be central to a story and firmly established in a piece so that we understand what is on the line. We also need to understand why the objective in the story means so much to the main character. In your story the weather turned bad and suddenly cleared up. There was insufficient real estate in the story devoted to the adversity that this created for the climbers, the setbacks it created and how they overcame. It just resolved itself. Show, Don't Tell is a tool that would allow us to experience the emotions of the climbers through the senses, as they scale the peak. It will make your story more engaging and allow us to connect with your characters more.